Thursday, September 18, 2008

Showing Vs Telling

The room was a mess.

I opened the door to find the toxic landfill that is my room. My jaw dropped at the horrific site. I look down at the floor to find nothing but clothes and mice running around. I closed the door and sighed as I begun to clean my room.

It was really hard.

I looked at the TV with such fury, clutching my controller. I watched in fear as I see a big gap that could lead mario to his doom. I took a breath and started to run toward the gap and took a big jump over the gap. I closed my eyes for moment and opened them again to see that he had made it. I jumped up for joy. But it was short lived as I seen a goomba had killed mario, and I had no more lives left. I fell to my knees and screamed at the TV, knowing that I had to start all the way back from the beginning.